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About "Kairos
Critique: Kudos and Curses"
This
web collection responds to a recent call for hypertexts:
"Letters and webtexts written in response to previous Kairos
issues are requested for this interactive part of the journal. We particularly
are looking for class projects or scholarly works that are based on Kairos
publications."
In
addition, the journal has been soliciting
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webtexts designed to help ground pedagogical theory in classroom praxis
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editorials from teachers regarding classroom experiences
On
this web site, I employ many different rhetorical strategies (testimonials,
satire, exemplification, close reading). The cheeky tone is an extension
of one facet of my teaching persona. That persona is suspicious of
academic navel-gazing and Orwellian, PMLA-style jargon. That persona
also occasionally lacks tact... but the Internet is no place for wimps,
as any netter who's ever flamed a newbie will tell you.
See: Comparison of this web site, before and after
testing.
When
I asked my technical writing students to review this web site, each
wrote about 125 words -- about 50 more than each had written in their critiques
of Kairos. Any number of variables may have prompted the
greater output, but more important, the comments reflected higher-level
critical thinking. This is not surprising, because the students understood
that I was going to use their critique to improve the site; hence, their
inquiry was more focused. Collectively, they leapt at the opportunity
to evaluate my work. (All quotes
in this section are partial comments...
see the
full text.)
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Some students complained about my tendency to overuse bold text.
(I have eased up a little.)
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Others were puzzled about the the purpose of this web site.
(I have since added other introductory
and explanatory material, including this section; I have also shortened
the blurbs on the home page, in order to pull more article titles higher
up on the page.)
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Some students simply didn't take to it.
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"Just as you thought that the new Kairos site was intimidating, I found
your site to be intimidating as well."
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"The language is not suitable for the everyday user. If this critique is
meant to appeal to other web design gurus like yourself then it is great!!!
But if you want the average person to critique your critique then you might
want to change some of the language."
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Others particularly disliked the tone of writing.
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"The tone sonds mean and condescending. If desginers/writers of Kairos
saw the critique, they would miss out on useful information because the
sarcastic tone would offend them."
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"...some of the funny, sarcastic phrases didn't seem to go with text like,
'online rhetoric is a complex and arcane pursuit, best left to brilliant
but soulless code-crunchers, or to gnostic theorists who have discovered
a medium that affirms their pre-existing ideas about textuality.' It makes
the reader wonder when you mean it and when you don't....
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"A lot of words you used I've never even heard of before. Halfway through
sentences I got frusterated and stopped reading them."
Even
a student who called this site "an egotistical chest-thump" nevertheless
had praise for my intentions: "To improve it, take your time but save the
attitude. By save, I mean keep it. It's an admirable one." In general,
the students who responded positively were engaging with the subject matter
(my critique of another web site) and were able to critique my critique
intelligently and with enthusiasm. My students generally had little
to say about the organization of my web site -- presumably becuase they
had little or no trouble navigating.
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"Your critique is well put and stated with due professional prose. The
critique is well thought and well done."
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"I felt that you showed us several ways to present the issues from blunt
to light humor. I liked what was said about the three suggestions on how
Kairos could best serve its readers. I agree completely with this."
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"Wow, insant credability. tenure anybody?"
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"I think the way you tried to critique it was actually good, you brought
out the most important points in form of instructions. You actually demonstrated
the instructions with showing the links at the end. I like that."
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"The critique page itself is layed out well, offering abstracts of each
portion on the main page which link to the full text for the section they
describe. This allows the user to get an overview of the critique on the
first page and then they can easily locate the full text for an area that
they're interested in. The critique makes it easy for users to obtain the
full text with only one click, a good idea since the main complaint of
the critique is how difficult it is to reach the full articles on Kairos."
What
do you think? Contact me at JerzDG@uwec.edu.
[update]
First posted Oct. 31, 1999
Dennis G. Jerz
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