Student 1   Sally Student Professor Dennis G. Jerz English 110 Researched Essay 31 January 2000 The Terrible Problem of X      Never in the history of mankind has problem X been so important to the daily lives of human beings across the globe. One need only look around to see how often we are talking about, worrying about, and recovering from  incidents of this terrible problem. In this paper, I will talk about how(1) problem X is one of the biggest threats to society today.(2) It affects us in our homes, at school, on the street, and everywhere we go.| (1) Cut the fluff.  I read papers, I don't weigh them. (2) This is a simplistic thesis.  You never offer a solution, mention other threats or provide anything else to draw my attention. (3) If you conclude your introductory paragraph in this manner, I expect to see one paragraph on homes , one on school, one on streets, etc.