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03 Oct 2007; Dennis
G. Jerz
In high school, you may have been rewarded for introducing every
quote with a full sentence identifying the author and mentioning the
author's credentials.
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Diane Vaughan, a professor of psychology at Boston
College and an expert in corporate reactions to emergencies, published
an extensive study of the 1986 Challenger disaster, called The
Challenger Launch Decision. In that book, on page 221, she
quotes an engineer who figures prominently in all accounts of the
disaster, and who says NASA was "absolutely relentless and
Machiavellian" about following procedures to the letter. |
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In The Challenger Launch Decision, by Diane
Vaughan, it says that an engineer who figures prominently in all
accounts of the disaster believes NASA was "absolutely relentless
and Machiavellian" about following procedures to the letter. |
An MLA-style paper does not ask you to give the full
name and credentials of your sources in the body of your paper, or even
the full title of your source. (Save that information for the Works
Cited list.)
In high school, where you might write a whole paper using only one
or two sources, you got points for calling attention to the fact that
you found a good source and were able to use it successfully in a paper.
But in a paper you write for college, you may use three or four different
sources in the same paragraph, and you may refer to several additional
sources without actually quoting from them. If you bring your essay
to a screeching halt in order to introduce the full name and credentials
of each author, you will bury whatever argument you were trying to make.
Any college writing handbook will have multiple examples of how to
cite multiple pages from the same source, multiple works from the same
author, and other variations. This handout does not attempt to
cover those details; instead, it emphasizes the stylistic and intellectual
value of integrating brief quotes from outside sources, using those
words to make your own original point. That's very different from the
wordy, high-schoolish method of introducing a quotation, presenting
the quoted words, and then summarizing what those words mean.
Integrate Quotations from Outside Sources
Don't interrupt the flow of your own argument to give the author's
full name or the source's full title. Spend fewer words introducing
your sources, and devote more words to expressing and developing your
own ideas in ways that use shorter quotations, or even just a few words,
from your outside sources.
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Have you ever noticed how some people just won't
shut up? In the book Why I Love Words by the authentic-sounding
fictional humorist Ira Talott, a similar point is made on page 45:
"The streets are full of people who talk to themselves, who
write journal entries to nobody. Do they feel that speaking
and writing is more important than listening and reading?
These people are boring at parties, but are they arrogant?
They are compulsive communicators. It's more likely that they
simply live in perpetual fear of silence." This quote shows
that people who talk too much may not actually be able to help themselves,
so we should be kind to them. |
| The above example makes a very small
point, quoting a much longer passage than necessary, and expending
far too many words on the buildup.
If you draw so much attention to your sources, your paper will
end up sounding a little like this: |
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Hi, there, I'm about to introduce a quote now. I'm
really proud that I found it because it took me a whole 15 minutes
to find it in a book. Are you ready? Okay here is my quote. [Several
sentences from the outside source.] Now listen up, because now that
I've shown you the quote, I'm going to re-state every point in my
own words, in order to make sure I get points for knowing what the
quote means. |
Our first revision will simply trim out the unnecessary words,
removing all references like "here is a relevant quote"
or "here is what I think this quote means," and instead
simply focusing on writing a single sentence that not only introduces
the quoted material, but also uses it in a sentence that drives
an argument.
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Talott is sympathetic towards "compulsive communicators,"
who are "boring at parties," but who are not actually
arrogant; instead, they "simply live in perpetual fear of silence"
(45). |
This revision is marginally better,
but only because it uses fewer words -- it's still just summarizing
Talott's argument, rather than using the outside quote to advance
the author's own argument. What this revision is missing is the
application of the quote, in the service of advancing the author's
original point.
Resist the temptation simply to add a sentence that says "This
quote supports my thesis because..." Instead, make your argument
flow naturally from your presentation of the borrowed material.
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Three Potential Ways to Apply Borrowed Material
The following examples show three different ways that the same quoted
material could be used to advance an original argument, by directly
tying the material from one source to related material from another
source.
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Talott is sympathetic towards
"compulsive communicators," who are "boring at parties"
(45), but who are not actually arrogant. These people "live
in perpetual fear of silence," which makes them "especially
susceptible to bottom-feeding advertising campaigns" (Jones
132) that prey upon low self-esteem and body image. |
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Talott is sympathetic towards
"compulsive communicators," who are "boring at parties"
(45), but who are not actually arrogant. These people "live
in perpetual fear of silence," not unlike in Miss
Bates from Emma, whose well-meaning but dull conversation
makes her an easy victim of the heroine's insensitive teasing. |
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Talott is sympathetic towards "compulsive communicators,"
who are "boring at parties" (45), but who are not actually
arrogant. These people "live in perpetual fear of silence,"
which contrasts sharply with the title character in Melville's
"Bartleby the Scrivener," who would "prefer not to"
leave the silent prison of his own making. [Note:
In this last case, Bartleby repeatedly says that he would "prefer
not to" do various things... I didn't cite a specific page
number, because the phrase appears in multiple places. --DGJ] |
Note the absence of phrases like, "This quote supports my claims
because..." or "Another quote offers a useful contrast with
this quote." These revisions aren't wasting any words talking about
"quotes" or "sources," just as a good carpenter
won't call attention to nail holes or sawed joints.
Integrate Borrowed Material Smoothly and Efficiently
Avoid clunky, high-schoolish documentation like the following:
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In the book Gramophone, Film, Typewriter,
by Fredrich A. Kittler, it talks about writing and gender, and says
on page 186, "an omnipresent metaphor equated women with the
white sheet of nature or virginity onto which a very male stylus
could inscribe the glory of its authorship." As you can see
from this quote, all this would change when women started working
as professional typists. |
The passages "it talks about"
and "As you can see from this quote" are very weak attempts
to engage with the ideas presented by Kittler. In addition, "In
the book... it talks" is ungrammatical ("the book"
and "it" are redundant subjects) and nonsensical (books
don't talk).
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In the mid 1880s, "an omnipresent metaphor equated
women with the white sheet of nature or virginity onto which a very
male stylus could inscribe the glory of its authorship" (Kittler
186), but all this would change when women started working as professional
typists. |
| This revision is marginally better, but
only because it uses fewer words -- it's still not integrating the
outside quote into the author's own argument. |
Don't expend words writing about quotes and sources.
If you use words like "in the book My Big Boring Academic Study,
by Professor H. Pompous Windbag III, it says it says" or "the
following quote by a government study shows that..." you are wasting
words that would be better spent developing your ideas.
Using about the same space as the original, see how MLA style helps
an author devote more words to developing the idea more fully. We shall
continue to revise the above example:
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Before the invention of the typewriter, "an omnipresent metaphor"
among professional writers concerned "a very male stylus"
writing upon the passive, feminized "white sheet of nature
or virginity" (Kittler 186). By contrast, the word "typewriter"
referred to the machine as well as the female typist who used it
(183). |
This revision is perhaps a bit hard to follow, when
taken out of context. But if you put a bit of introduction into
the space you saved by cutting back on wasted words, the thought
is clearer. |
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To Kittler, the concept of the pen as a masculine symbol imposing
form and order upon feminized, virginal paper was "an omnipresent
metaphor" (186) in the days before the typewriter. But businesses
were soon clamoring for the services of typists, who were mostly
female. In fact, "typewriter" meant both the machine and
the woman who used it (183). |
| The above revision mentions Kittler's name in the
body, and cites two different places in Kittler's text (identified
by page number alone). This is a perfectly acceptable variation
of the standard author-page parenthetical citation. |
While MLA Style generally expects authors to save details for the Works
Cited pages, there's nothing wrong with introducing the work more fully
-- if you have a good reason to do so.
For example, in a paper on the history of the typewriter, you might
want to refer to the typist who appears in T. S. Eliot's poem, "The
Waste Land." If so, you should identify the source as a poem, so
that reader won't mistake the reference for an academic article. In
a similar way, if your paper mainly cites poets, you might need to identify
somebody else as an editor or literary critic. Or, perhaps you feel
that a particular author's nationality, ethnicity, gender, age, or education
level may affect the relevance of a particular point raised by the author.
Don't give the full, high-schoolish introduction without a
good reason -- the presence of irrelevant details is a signal
to your reader that you don't know what you want to say.
Dennis G. Jerz
03 Oct 2007 -- extracted from a handout that focused on finding
good sources.
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